Stream of thought I suppose.

[ForAnother]

This is more or less thoughts... nothing really poetic.. I shoulda just written it as a paragraph but, I like some of the spacing of it. Stream of thoughts if you care to read.

 

I don't see it like you do

normal days

awkward days.

I see the dark and I see the light.

grey to me

is inadequate.

It doesn't share the complexion

or the simplicity

of black

or white.

 

I see the glass, but I can't see through it.

I see the dark clouds, yet I don't see the rain it drops.

Do you see something I do not?

Do you see the emptiness in me

that I do not see?

Am I oblivious to my faults,

Am I oblivious to my strange hate I have

for things.

For you?

What do I look like from the outside?

 

I don't know how to judge myself,

because I see something within me,

that others do not, because they cannot.

I try and let them but, it is impossible

for any to see. Its not that I am complex

its not that I have some dark secret,

I just have a strangeness to me

that only I know about.

But I would be more comfortable

for others to see it. Knowing

I am vulnerable,

I am glass for all to see,

yet distant with the rain,

and embodied in the dark clouds.

 

Ignorance maybe?

or am I blind?

Oblivious?

 

ForAnother

[11flower]

Wow. You are expressing some pretty poignant thoughts here. I remember feeling this way during my youth years. But sometimes I feel this way even now when at 48 years of age; that is if I'm reading it right.

 

I think it's great you posted this writing and I like it. You should keep writing. Someone will read it and benefit by it; positively.

 

Thanks,

 

11flower

[thatguy04]

That was really good, even if you think they were just thoughts, they make a nice poem in the end, good job .

[ForAnother]

I appreciate it very much you guys. I read it again about 2 hours later... and I can now see what I was thinking... its kinda funny how you don't really understand what you are writing when its in your head. But when it clears it all makes sense... because you begin to think of both sides of the situation. Very fun to see..

 

And thank you both again for the response.

 

ForAnother

[under_the_pressure]

Thoughts or not, I like it.

 

I like the choice of words. I just really like it.

 

You are going to be famous one day. And I'm going to be your biggest fan, I already am.

 

under*

[ForAnother]

Always there to make me smile Under.

 

 

ForAnother