ForAnother Posted November 28, 2004 Share Posted November 28, 2004 This is more or less thoughts... nothing really poetic.. I shoulda just written it as a paragraph but, I like some of the spacing of it. Stream of thoughts if you care to read. I don't see it like you do normal days awkward days. I see the dark and I see the light. grey to me is inadequate. It doesn't share the complexion or the simplicity of black or white. I see the glass, but I can't see through it. I see the dark clouds, yet I don't see the rain it drops. Do you see something I do not? Do you see the emptiness in me that I do not see? Am I oblivious to my faults, Am I oblivious to my strange hate I have for things. For you? What do I look like from the outside? I don't know how to judge myself, because I see something within me, that others do not, because they cannot. I try and let them but, it is impossible for any to see. Its not that I am complex its not that I have some dark secret, I just have a strangeness to me that only I know about. But I would be more comfortable for others to see it. Knowing I am vulnerable, I am glass for all to see, yet distant with the rain, and embodied in the dark clouds. Ignorance maybe? or am I blind? Oblivious? ForAnother Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
11flower Posted November 28, 2004 Share Posted November 28, 2004 Wow. You are expressing some pretty poignant thoughts here. I remember feeling this way during my youth years. But sometimes I feel this way even now when at 48 years of age; that is if I'm reading it right. I think it's great you posted this writing and I like it. You should keep writing. Someone will read it and benefit by it; positively. Thanks, 11flower Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thatguy04 Posted November 28, 2004 Share Posted November 28, 2004 That was really good, even if you think they were just thoughts, they make a nice poem in the end, good job . Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForAnother Posted November 28, 2004 Author Share Posted November 28, 2004 I appreciate it very much you guys. I read it again about 2 hours later... and I can now see what I was thinking... its kinda funny how you don't really understand what you are writing when its in your head. But when it clears it all makes sense... because you begin to think of both sides of the situation. Very fun to see.. And thank you both again for the response. ForAnother Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
under_the_pressure Posted November 28, 2004 Share Posted November 28, 2004 Thoughts or not, I like it. I like the choice of words. I just really like it. You are going to be famous one day. And I'm going to be your biggest fan, I already am. under* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForAnother Posted November 28, 2004 Author Share Posted November 28, 2004 Always there to make me smile Under. ForAnother Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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