under_the_pressure Posted October 28, 2004 Share Posted October 28, 2004 she digs her fingernails into her palms clenches her jaw shut turns up her stereo as tears stream down her face thoughts race through her mind but she knows shes better than them she can make it through they'll need her one day she wants out of this broken home and all these lies but she has to wait ...suffer... one day she'll be free that's all she holds on to is the thought of him and the 'one day' I wrote this earlier...first poem in a long time. I don't know what to think, *blah* opinions welcome. No title either. under* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tiffany82 Posted October 28, 2004 Share Posted October 28, 2004 That's a powerful poem. I like it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
under_the_pressure Posted October 28, 2004 Author Share Posted October 28, 2004 Hey, thanks for the comment. I usually just cry everything out, but for once i tried writing, this is what I got. under* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForAnother Posted October 29, 2004 Share Posted October 29, 2004 Sorry you havin a hard time. A lot of your poems show your stress with this kinda stuff. Things will get better hun. When I was younger I had it hard, and I lived in silence. When you get older and people mature around you more, you eventually are able to open up easier... and things get easier. I enjoyed your poem very much. To the point, it feels good. ForAnother Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
under_the_pressure Posted October 29, 2004 Author Share Posted October 29, 2004 ForAnother, Thanks for your comment. I know things will get better, I'm not going to give up. I have my days...just like everyone else. Thanks again. #1 fan under* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForAnother Posted October 29, 2004 Share Posted October 29, 2004 Too sweet Under. #1 it is. ForAnother Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bluey Posted October 29, 2004 Share Posted October 29, 2004 hi its a very good poem i hope everthing going ok for you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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