Serendipity1607307077 Posted October 23, 2004 Share Posted October 23, 2004 Doesn't matter what I say Doesn't matter what I do Nothing seems to impact you. I try so hard To make things right But everything I do evades your sight. I know that you love me But I'm fighting against the tide Becoming dead inside. I do as much as I can for you To the point that my body aches and burns But I get nothing in return. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nexus532 Posted October 23, 2004 Share Posted October 23, 2004 they say 98% of all pomes express a person's thoughts and feelings at any givin time. This is a really good pome but also sad, if there is any truth to it then i think its time to cast old relationships aside and look beyond the wall for new ones. After all loseing your feelings inside turns you cold outside. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sasha12 Posted October 23, 2004 Share Posted October 23, 2004 i think i know how you are feeling in this poem and I really like it. I feel the same way with my bf too. I know he cares about me but simetimes it just isn't enough I mean sometimes I feel like he isn't putting enough into the relationship and sometimes I feel no matter how hard I try I can't please him and I'm left feeling incomplete. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForAnother Posted October 24, 2004 Share Posted October 24, 2004 I liked the choice of the rhymes you used. I thought it was done superbly. ForAnother Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Serendipity1607307077 Posted October 25, 2004 Author Share Posted October 25, 2004 Thanks for the feedback guys... think that's the best poem I've written in a long while.. it's a wonder what emotional moment can do.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
under_the_pressure Posted October 25, 2004 Share Posted October 25, 2004 I really like this poem, and the emotion it shows. Sorry I didn't get to it sooner, but great poem. under* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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