Serendipity1607307077 Posted October 16, 2004 Share Posted October 16, 2004 This poem is pretty rough around the edges, but please provide feedback! I Hope You tell me that you love me And I believe it to be true But sometimes you make me wonder Because I do so much for you. Most of the time I don’t mind I take pleasure in loving you, being kind But when I want you to do the same It’s another person I seem to find. You say you don’t want me doing things for you That you can take care of yourself too I do things in the hope that you’ll do the same in return And I really HOPE – but you never seem to. I know you have been alone for so long But I don’t think caring for you is wrong I’m just trying to make your life more comfortable Because I love you – we always seem to get along. All of my dreams you seem to have fulfilled I’ll protect you forever, for you, even kill Despite some of the things you do and say I love you, only you, and always will. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gauchori Posted October 16, 2004 Share Posted October 16, 2004 WOW... I loved that poem... that was great. I loved the ways it rhymed and the words. It would have been nice If I got told this by a girl... but I'm usually the poet Great peom again and keep writing! 8) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
viola Posted October 16, 2004 Share Posted October 16, 2004 i love it its very true and very beautifull.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForAnother Posted October 16, 2004 Share Posted October 16, 2004 I liked it... ummm I don't really know what to say. I guess I liked the simplicity of it. But there are details I feel like your missing. Something more I need from it... All in all nice. ForAnother Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ang3l2004 Posted October 19, 2004 Share Posted October 19, 2004 Nice poem Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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