alittleoverlife Posted October 12, 2004 Share Posted October 12, 2004 I was reading some poetry by others here and i thought I might put up some of mine i wrote while healing after a breakup. the first one I wrote when it frist happened, and although others were written that I am not posting, the second was is like my answer to the first, after my healing time. i hope they're not too bad and don't shame me too much. I never thought life would be like this When alone is what I'd be I couldn't imagine how much I'd miss You being here with me But now you're gone, you need your space And I was just too close I only wish to wake up to your face God I need you most I know that we can still be together If you only give a chance Let's not run away from one another And stop with all the "cant's" So just come back to the one you know And end this heartache and pain Together we will continue to grow And live in eachother's name I know it's your choice, I can't make you But I hope the choice is clear You know it should always be us two Believe me forever dear Well all I can say no matter where you go And no matter what you do I will always love my baby, so, I'll always be here for you I waited all night for you to come back Praying for you all the time But it seems that my heart was simply off track Since you committed the crime You blinded my eyes and closed off my heart To all of those bitter lies I didn't know where I could start After you severed those ties I was hopelessly lost, out on my own Without you by my side But when I realized I was really alone I pushed myself and I tried I succeeded in healing my broken soul And now I'll never look back You were too much for me to control And keep you loving what I lacked I tried my best to save our life And bring us back to one But you chose to be our severing knife And now what's done is done So goodbye from my heart, goodbye from my eyes I no longer have space for you Good luck with your new love and hearing his lies Cause one day you'll be like this too Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ang3l2004 Posted October 12, 2004 Share Posted October 12, 2004 Very beautiful poem and very well written I liked it alot and think that you should continue posting your poetry it is very good Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
viola Posted October 12, 2004 Share Posted October 12, 2004 its a very beautiful poem, keep 'em coming.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForAnother Posted October 12, 2004 Share Posted October 12, 2004 Your reply is just incredible. This bit: I tried my best to save our life And bring us back to one But you chose to be our severing knife And now what's done is done So goodbye from my heart, goodbye from my eyes I no longer have space for you Good luck with your new love and hearing his lies Cause one day you'll be like this too That is just awsome. I love it. I been there too. While your in it your like "well those are just cuz she's upset" Then you realize after "is she really worth my own self, she doesn't really care enough for me to want what I want from her." Its tough, I hate this part. I just wanted to say that I didn't really enjoy your first one, but I found it necessary to make the second one so compelling. I really enjoyed the response tho. ForAnother Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gauchori Posted October 12, 2004 Share Posted October 12, 2004 I like your writing, it express a lot about you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
2rublueeyes21 Posted October 13, 2004 Share Posted October 13, 2004 wow, awsome poem! I can definitly relate to this. You're a good writer..keep it up! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
alittleoverlife Posted October 13, 2004 Author Share Posted October 13, 2004 hey everyone, thanks for the replies... its nice to hear compliments every once and awhile Anyway, here's another poem I found that I wrote a long time ago, and although I don't remember who it was for, I like it... I never tell her how I feel Although it hurts me so And in my heart I do conceal The love for her I know And when I sit down at night She is what I see And nothing ever makes it right Until she is with me Her voice echoes in my ears A soft, angelic sound And although it brings so many tears My heart it does still pound And so I live and I do wait For that special day When by luck, or even fate I truly get to say "You are the only one for me I hope I am that too And yours, I will, forever be I truly do love you" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
alittleoverlife Posted October 13, 2004 Author Share Posted October 13, 2004 here's another one... I started out life as a child Wanting to live it so free But as I got older I wondered Is there someone here for me? It seemed that alone was nothing That two was better than one So I found I was suddenly missing A person for me to love But then I learned what love was And how it was hard to find Often mistaken for crushes My love kept falling behind What could I do to find it? To make it just come to me? Why was love so pushy? Why didn't it let it just be? Finally I gave up searching Decided it was time for myself I was no longer going to worry About being with someone else Of course then I found her, That girl that made my heart melt I couldn't believe what I heard She felt the same way that I felt! But oh I should've known Should've turned and walked away Was I really going to do this again? After I swore love off that day? I made a bad choice on my part You know how the story goes It was the best for quite a while Until she chose what she chose How could I be so stupid? How come I didn't see? This is why hindsight's 20/20 Cause that time should've been for me Well now time is back in my pocket I'm not going to give it away I'm holding on for at least a bit And save love for another day Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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