NotJustAnybody Posted October 10, 2004 Share Posted October 10, 2004 You bottle your emotions Bury them deep inside Staring into your eyes I see where they hide Searching for a reason i can make them appear But come up empty Our time draws near When will i feel assured that your words are honest? When will you fill that hole in my heart? That remains from uncertain lies Your embrace mistakens me for love When i know that its merely pitty Because you know i feel this way And you know how i cry Your just waiting to finish this Waiting for goodbye So i'll do you a favor And end it now I'll eaise your pain Bye bye beautiful Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bilal72401 Posted October 11, 2004 Share Posted October 11, 2004 nice poem, sorry u feel like that, keep writing, great poem i enjoyed it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForAnother Posted October 11, 2004 Share Posted October 11, 2004 I know what your going through. I liked the childlike ending. Some of it is a bit wordy... but all in all, it was interesting. I really think your ending saves it. But I feel like its all summed up in the end... maybe add some mystery? ForAnother Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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