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Seasons of Love

 

Look out your window,

I'm standing below

holding nothing more

than this simple rose.

 

Summer,

As the heat rises and

the sun glares

I'm still standing below,

holding my burning rose.

 

Autumn,

See the leaves fall,

and the trees lose their iridescence

I'm still standing below,

holding my prismatic rose.

 

Winter,

Feel the harsh cold,

and the bitter frost.

I'm still standing below,

holding my frozen rose.

 

Spring,

Watch the flowers grow,

and life return to our world

I'm still standing below,

holding my weathered rose.

 

It's tattered

torn and wilted.

Watch as the colorless petals

fall gracefully to the ground.

 

Look out your window,

I'm standing below

holding nothing more

than my love for you.

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Maybe I am cold, because at 15, I didn't really have a crush, nor did I really care about girls yet. I guess I was a late bloomer. Not until about 17 did I really care. So i am glad for you m8. It was good but I don't like how you put the time of year before each stanza. I found like I knew what you were going to say in each season too.

 

Sorry if this is harsh but its out there for criticism (well i hope people critisize my work cuz I wanna get better and see what people really do like) but I still liked it, it made me read through the whole thing which few make me do.

 

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