bilal72401 Posted September 28, 2004 Share Posted September 28, 2004 Hello people and thank you sooo much for reading my poetry, i wrote this is class i was really mad while i was writing it because this guy tried to run over me on intension while i was walking to class but i wrote it about something totally different this IS MY FIRST POEM ever, i enjoy reading peotry, and i think its kool, i dont know how i did, please tell me if i did some thing wrong, i love u all this site ROCKS!!!! heres the poem: What would you name this? When I see you in my head It's always like you are leaving When ever I call on you, so I may see It seems like you always are fading I just wanna know who you are I wanna know you, I wanna see you I just wanna feel you, I wanna take you Who ever you are I know you are out there When I see you My eyes will shatter Because of the light that will come from you The light from the heavens, which God has blessed upon you I will take you away, somewhere far away I will love you I will take care of you All my life, all of eternity Even in the heavens that will be blessed upon us Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
behind_these_eyes Posted September 28, 2004 Share Posted September 28, 2004 hey, I dont usually name my poems so I'm no help there. I just wanted to let you know I thought that was really great! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bilal72401 Posted September 28, 2004 Author Share Posted September 28, 2004 thank you soo much that means alot to me, because that was my first poem love u all ur friend Bilal Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Protex Posted September 28, 2004 Share Posted September 28, 2004 Very well done, I like it a lot. definitely keep writing. As for titles, that's not my forte. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
under_the_pressure Posted September 28, 2004 Share Posted September 28, 2004 I'm not good at giving names to my poems either. But that poem is really great. I really like; When I see you in my head It's always like you are leaving When ever I call on you, so I may see It seems like you always are fading Great job. Keep writing, it helps. Also, Welcome to eNotAlone. It's very addicting and you have many friends. We're always here. under* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
i_hate_the_world47 Posted September 28, 2004 Share Posted September 28, 2004 I thought that was a great poem.Especially since it was your first.As for names,sorry i cant help you there. ~Meagan~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bilal72401 Posted September 29, 2004 Author Share Posted September 29, 2004 Hey all thank you soo much for the posts i am soo happy, i dont know what to say i think poetry is fun. 8) i am definitely gonna write more and more, i love reading other peoples writings too they are all GREAT!!!! 8) well later all ur friend Bilal Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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