Protex Posted September 27, 2004 Share Posted September 27, 2004 This is my first attempt at poetry guys, I'm in a really painful state of mind right now. Forever a Dream. Pain, so precise aimed directly at my exsistence Anguish sweeps over me watching you waiting for you. Exasperation of my soul at the thought of forsaking the one thing valuable to me the only one I love the only one. Every essense of your being, entwined within my mind Every word spoken lingering from the remains of my heart There is nowhere to run and nowhere to hide, nowhere to go nowhere to be without you there is nowhere Implored is the one thing you shall not endow Denied is the sole thing that hope keeps me fighting for, keeps me alive for The one thing that would lead me from this nowhere, lead me into your somewhere lead me into the heaven, the heaven of you.. You will remain a dream, my love. forever dreamt about forever wanted forever loved but no longer wept for. I love her so damn much, I know she loves me too. But I can't stand to see her love someone else. I'll love you always. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
under_the_pressure Posted September 27, 2004 Share Posted September 27, 2004 Very good poem, it's very deep. I know it's hard seeing the one you love, love someone else. You know I'm here for you, always. Never forget that, and I wish you the best. You deserve this. under* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
behind_these_eyes Posted September 27, 2004 Share Posted September 27, 2004 that was really great, but I'm sorry about your situation. I hope everything works out for the best, and keep writing! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
i_hate_the_world47 Posted September 27, 2004 Share Posted September 27, 2004 That was a very good poem.I am sorry you are feeling this way.Good luck and i hope better days come for you. ~Meagan~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Protex Posted September 27, 2004 Author Share Posted September 27, 2004 Thank you all for your comments, they mean a lot to me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EmptySoul Posted October 3, 2004 Share Posted October 3, 2004 Great job. I loved this line: Exasperation of my soul I wish you the best of luck. Empty Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Protex Posted November 18, 2004 Author Share Posted November 18, 2004 Thanks for all the feedback. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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