MGandV Posted August 31, 2004 Share Posted August 31, 2004 Silence on the outside Loudness on the inside Hear what you can see See what you can hide Take your time Be young and be strong One step at a time And you can't go wrong The path maybe rocky But the choice is yours You can live out all your dreams Or hide them behind closed doors If you must get mad Then get mad If you feel you need to cry Don't hold back, they'd only wonder why We all have one life And we all go through it with a grain of salt Time has a hold on us all If you can tip the hourglass, you can bring it to a halt Minutes Hours Seconds and Days There are so many answers, there are so many ways But anger will only bring you strife And no one will hear you when you give up on life Reach deep into your soul and don't lose control Don't dwell in the past, look forward and follow the right path Your young my friend All you see is the end Life won't stand still just because you cannot see You need to open your eyes and let yourself be My words to you may go unheaded But I have been there and I have lived through it Life is tough But so are you Take it all in stride And let your heart be true And one day when you close your eyes You'll look back at what has been You will say to yourself "I got this far" In this game of life, you will want to win The path maybe rocky But the choice is yours You can live out all your dreams Or hide them behind closed doors Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mymelancholysoul Posted August 31, 2004 Share Posted August 31, 2004 The message this poem presents is both powerful and comforting. I am a fan of emotion and thats what I am collecting alot from this piece. The repetition at the end, really brings it all together and I hope to read more by you. The path maybe rocky But the choice is yours You can live out all your dreams Or hide them behind closed doors ---------->Nikki Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
under_the_pressure Posted August 31, 2004 Share Posted August 31, 2004 That poem was terrific. I hope you post more. It was very powerful. Great job! under* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MGandV Posted September 1, 2004 Author Share Posted September 1, 2004 Thanks again for all the positive feedback, everyone. I am having quite a ball in this forum. I haven't wrote so much in such a short time period. If anyone is curious, I am 33 years old (I'm getting up there!). I am married and have two kids (boys). Started writing when I was in high school as a way to express myself. I hated high school. I was miserable there. But I lived through it. Then I just completely stopped at about 10 years ago. Just recently an old friend of mine has been an inspiration to me, and she got me into writing again. I'm just having fun with it. For all of you in this forum, Keep up the good work! Poetry is a great way to let things out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
i_hate_the_world47 Posted September 2, 2004 Share Posted September 2, 2004 Well,out of all your well written poems on this forum,i think this maybe my favorite.Job well done. ~Meagan~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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