Angels Cry -Comments/Criticism Requested but not expected-

[mymelancholysoul]

Well, I don't really know what sparked this piece. I am keeping with this new style because I enjoy how the words flow. Not the best work but certainly not the worst. Your suggestions and comments are, as awalys, much appreciated! Check me out on deviantart too! link removed

 

Shes on a featherbed

Where a thousand angels

Cry their tears.

And somewhere,

A soft white glow

Fades in and out

Swallowing

Her whole.

Coal colored eyes cast to the side

Such a delicate smile

With fingertips rapping and tapping,

Feeling for life.

His hands brought her here

To this bed on the floor.

Searching and scanning,

Touching and laughing,

Through all of her tears.

Kissing his neck with

Pursed lips

Just brushing

And touching

No love

Or emotion.

He feels her there

With closed eyes.

His smile,

Fading in the night.

But his prize has left

And is pouring

Into the sink

And sinking

To the floor.

Whispers echo and scream

Pushing her over,

And somewhere,

A soft white glow

Fades in and out

Swallowing

Her whole.

[i_hate_the_world47]

wow that was a very good poem.You have alot of talent.

 

~Meagan~