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what are you crying for, please reply


dpressedone89

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im so sick and so tired

of you draining my soul

as long as you live

inside i'll never be whole

you hate life so much

you threaten to leave

the attention you need

when your gone we will grieve

you are so down inside

this attention you crave

to get it you lie and threaten

to dig yourself an early grave

life isnt so bad

but you may want it to be

your lies make a noose

and hang you, as you will see

the things you pretend

so bold and untrue

i've grown accustomed to it

i will never give my attention to you

you say that your depressed

suicidal and alone

you cry at night wishing

we would let you die on your own

but the truth is your life is good

no true reason to complain

the rich happy child wanting attention

why, we are unable to explain

but deep inside your soul

lives a happy person in you

parents may ignore this child

so attention you need so true

be happy with what you have

dont complain or whine

the sun will come out

the sun will still shine

dont preten to know what its like

to live the way that i do living reflectful

because when you steal part of me

and claim my life as your own it is deemed disrespectful

your life is better than mine

and yet im happier than you are

you see dead stars falling

i see shining stars

you pretend to be sad

for attention you'll get never more

you live the best life of all

what are you crying for

 

-stitches aka The Antihero

 

any oppinions, comments/criticism anythin?

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I really like the message's your poem gives off. The flow falls fine and your honesty comes as a great comfort. =) Thank you muchas for the comments you leave on my work, I do hope to read more by you in the future. I would also ask that you consider creating a Deviantart account, so that all your work can remain on display. Just a thought. Take care.

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That poem was great. Maybe to me it said something else. One thing I don't like is sympathy. I don't like getting sympathy and giving it to people who want it. And to me that poem pretty much says that he/she is 'frontin' about life and just wants sympathy. I know many people like that. Your poem is good. I want to keep seeing it.

 

always,

under*

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