mymelancholysoul Posted August 29, 2004 Share Posted August 29, 2004 Summer sun, Falls to pieces Like the crumbling sidewalk Beneath her feet. Cool eyes follow The road ever onward And they hope To see the light. A smile hangs Over pale white cheeks As if waiting For better days. The smell of his hair Stirs up memories She thought were forgotten. Oh and his touch, Brings back life To her otherwise dead Frame. In his hands She burns alive And ashes blow Within his kiss. But he did lie With a promise for forever That lasted a mere year. In time her heart will heal Though she can never Give it the chance. And in one soft step A siren does wail As her body falls, To the ground below. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
i_hate_the_world47 Posted August 30, 2004 Share Posted August 30, 2004 wow deep poem.i loved it.it was full of emotion and flowed so well. ~meagan~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
strawberry_gashes17 Posted August 30, 2004 Share Posted August 30, 2004 hey, this one is pretty good... not one of your best but still good. and i kno exactly what u are talkin about. well i think thats all for now, oh bye the way put "mommy" in, i kno that A LOT of ppl will like it. k thats all. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dpressedone89 Posted August 30, 2004 Share Posted August 30, 2004 hey, great poem, its amazing and deep, i hope to see more of your writing, by the way i like the way you use simlies and metaphores in your writing. -stitches aka The Antihero Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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