MGandV Posted August 26, 2004 Share Posted August 26, 2004 Stop Listen Open your ears Can you hear that sound? It's your beating heart It just took a dive Into the depths of the hollow grave You dug for yourself You just couldn't cope All the anger runs deep inside You've lost all reason to hope And the friends you thought you had They just handed you the shovel And said "We'll give you a hand!" Now isn't that grand You look up and stare All the world that surrounds you One by one you see them fall From beneath the blackened sky You feel a cold chill as it hits your skin They've all come to join you Where fools will go Fools will follow Even to the end Stop Listen Open your ears Can you hear that sound? It's your own flesh and blood She's crying out for you She's been waiting so long to tell you Just what's become of herself Was she not worth a dime? You took with you her innocence You've let her down this time If only you could taste her pain Your little girl has lost her way Your self indulgence blinded your eyes What a big surprise She's hiding behind the mirror From voices she hears at night Memories reveal your past Her wounds that never healed For the life you leave behind will follow your lead She just couldn't cope All the anger runs deep inside She's lost all reason to hope She's come to join you Where fools will go Fools will follow Even to the end Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dpressedone89 Posted August 26, 2004 Share Posted August 26, 2004 nice poem your a talented writer, by the way i see your new welcome to enotalone, keep writing i like your work -stitches aka The Antihero Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MGandV Posted August 26, 2004 Author Share Posted August 26, 2004 Thanks! I see most of the writing is from younger people. Well, I guess I have a different perspective in writing and wanted to show it. I've been writing since high school. Mostly songs, but I kind of went hiatus for over 10 years. Just started writing again. My friend from the other poem gave me the inspiration to start again. Something I really enjoy now and find it much more natural to me. Once again, thanks for the feedback! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dpressedone89 Posted August 26, 2004 Share Posted August 26, 2004 yeah i noticed most of the writing here is by younger people its really nice reading something a little less angsty, no offence to anyone, i just started like a year ago at the most, thats amazing after a 10 year hiatus to be able to write like that good job -stitches aka The Antihero Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
behind_these_eyes Posted August 26, 2004 Share Posted August 26, 2004 That was really really great. I loved the refrain and how the wording was simple but kinda made you think in a complex way. Great writing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
i_hate_the_world47 Posted August 26, 2004 Share Posted August 26, 2004 Wonderful poem.Welcome to enotalone and i hope t hear more. ~meagan~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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