i_hate_the_world47 Posted August 22, 2004 Share Posted August 22, 2004 Come dear child Walk in the door Drop your bloody razor As you fall to the floor Your soul is forgiven As well as your sins Just let yourself sleep As the healing begins Wash away the darkness And begin eternal sleep Because even though your forgiven Scars run deep Awake no more Screams long gone But the healing process Is far from done Comments?Opinions? ~Meagan~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hardcore Posted August 22, 2004 Share Posted August 22, 2004 i love it you take the breath from my weak luns with this one hardcore is what they call me but i'll have a soft spot here in my haret for this one 8) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
keep45 Posted August 22, 2004 Share Posted August 22, 2004 I have to agree. Very deep poem, very nicely written. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Final cut Posted August 23, 2004 Share Posted August 23, 2004 Good! You really hit the nail right on spot. I add a text here because I cant' create a new topic. You can care about it or not. I wrote it a day when I felt the depression coming. Translated from my native language. The depression is coming! I feel it coming have felt it for days now tears appears in my eyes sudden floods of thoughts, which hearts happy moments makes me sad two lovers kissing makes me think of what I will never have what feelings I will never feel the music sounds different my hands and fingers can't control the strings on guitar anymore I spill water because of the floods of thoughts a strange unexplainable painfull sadness the pain is constant now when I lie, sit or stand cut my self to feel pain explainable pain making scares to make me remember the pain no one to talk to no one to hug no one to kiss no one to love no friends no lover no lust for life no courage to end it my selfmade suffering creating a bubble a safe on so no one will heart me so I can't feel the people looking at me talking about me sweating, beacuse of the fear fear of people coming to close why does it hurt why don't I do anything about it why are humans self destructive why can't we drag our self out nobody else will do it nobody else than you can see your pain and suffering seconds running so fast I can't follow my thought running faster I'm lost what hurts my self? is it the people close to me it can't be no one cares about some one who don't laugh give the world a smile and it will smile right back at you right! but is a smile enough to set me free free from the misty fog fog has alway been and will alway be there will always come rain after sun End Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
i_hate_the_world47 Posted August 23, 2004 Author Share Posted August 23, 2004 Wow that was a good poem final.I liked it alot. ~meagan~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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