dpressedone89 Posted August 14, 2004 Share Posted August 14, 2004 The End Release The tears on the floor come from the pain in my eyes I dare not lie to hide it for it is too consuming to disguise the reason is unknown but the pain still exists so I bury my head in my arms not wanting to see the state of my wrists and I grin for once in a long while as I empty myself onto the floor my heart is cold and black but this pain I shall feel nevermore -sTiTchEs i posted it asking for advice because i was entering it in a contest i thought i would share the final copy with you all. what do you guys think? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
i_hate_the_world47 Posted August 14, 2004 Share Posted August 14, 2004 awesome =D> you will definitely win that contest. ~Meagan~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gauchori Posted August 14, 2004 Share Posted August 14, 2004 lol Stitches? you again? come on bro!!! Well... its is a poem... lol Joking there buddy. I think its sounds just like when my 5 year old sister trayed to spelled I love you. lol j/k Sorry. I think It sounds... someway... some how... I... it sounds... like.... Umm... I'm killing you ain't I? lol Sorry. I think it sounds good. But the peom is not that good bro. Because I hink you didn't wrote it from your heart; you wrote it to win a contest. Sorry to be that hard but... I Hope i see ya alround!!! 8) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stinkweed Posted August 14, 2004 Share Posted August 14, 2004 Cool poem. It's really good. Good luck on the contest. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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