behind_these_eyes Posted August 11, 2004 Share Posted August 11, 2004 I think this poem kind of sucks, but I had it lying around and wanted to know what people thought. It's not a cry for help or attention or anything; I wrote it a while ago when I was feeling really down. Hope lived in a small town Where some had never known her And others had forgotten her But she was alone. Escaping heavy weights, She disappeared to find That all she had and all she was Just never was enough. No one noticed Hope or that she felt she wasn't needed She left each day, came back the same, And no one knew she'd gone. One day Hope lost herself She up and left the small town. But this time she didn't return. And this time people noticed. They searched for her day and night, in the cold. Now they knew how Hope felt every day; desperately searching for something she'd never find alive. They found Hope, far beyond repair. They wished to God that they could revive her. But all they had and all they were Would never be enough. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stinkweed Posted August 11, 2004 Share Posted August 11, 2004 I don't think it's bad... In fact, I really like it. It tells a story... Good job =D>. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dezeard Posted August 11, 2004 Share Posted August 11, 2004 That's a pretty interesting poem. It is very complex and deep if you take the time to understand it (which isn't hard). However, Hope shouldn't have built her life on what other people did. She should have lived from what she did for herself and others. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
i_hate_the_world47 Posted August 11, 2004 Share Posted August 11, 2004 That was a great poem.Good work. ~Meagan~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sachadesousa Posted August 11, 2004 Share Posted August 11, 2004 all i can say is GJ P.S: GJ stands for good job > CS NERDS know what im talkin about P.S.S: CS stands for Counter Strike P.S.S.S: I dont know what P.S. stands for Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stinkweed Posted August 11, 2004 Share Posted August 11, 2004 P.S.S.S: I dont know what P.S. stands for PS= Post-statement. CS NERDS know what im talkin about P.S.S: CS stands for Counter Strike LOL Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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