bruind Posted August 10, 2004 Share Posted August 10, 2004 lying in bed at night, staring blankly at the ceiling, tossing and turning as my mind goes wondering, droplets of tears falling as the memories of you fill my mind, the image of your face and sweet smile, now i'll leave behind. goodbye now to the one i used to have -- my dear love, goodbye to your enchanting voice -- the music to my ears, despair and solitude are now my only companion, for you my love is no longer beside me -- today and tomorrow. goodbye to the mesmerizing scent of your perfume, that used to envelope me everytime you're around, goodbye to the warmth your embrace used to give, for now i have to let your arms go. oh baby, i miss you now more than ever... but i have to accept, you're not mine any longer, so God help me bury all these that i feel. and start a new life, without the one who gave meaning to my life... so what you guys think of my poem? my first time again since high school... hope you like it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
i_hate_the_world47 Posted August 10, 2004 Share Posted August 10, 2004 Amazing poem.It had alot of emotion in it.Good Job. ~Meagan~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
black_magic Posted August 10, 2004 Share Posted August 10, 2004 I really liked your poem, i think you used a wide range of methods to express feelings or atleast show them as vissions, i liked the line as you say you were embraced by there perfume ... like an envelope i thought that was pretty impressive. so yeah, i like your poetry! black magic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stinkweed Posted August 10, 2004 Share Posted August 10, 2004 Great poem. I really liked it. It's really good, and has so many strong emotions. Great job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bruind Posted August 10, 2004 Author Share Posted August 10, 2004 thanks guys... guess those are really just visions... we haven't broken up yet.. though we're going through some hard times right now... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stinkweed Posted August 10, 2004 Share Posted August 10, 2004 I'm glad they're just visions, then. I hope everything ends up fine. Good luck, and best wishes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bruind Posted August 10, 2004 Author Share Posted August 10, 2004 thank you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ang3l2004 Posted August 11, 2004 Share Posted August 11, 2004 Very nice Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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