ang3l2004 Posted August 9, 2004 Share Posted August 9, 2004 One look into your eyes and I melt, It's the most incredible feeling I have ever felt. Do you know that I dream of you at night? I see you clearly it's a beautiful sight. The arrow that I got shot with that day, Has made me in love that is the way it's going to stay. Nobody can stop the love that I feel for you, This is just something that I cannot do. You make everything better with just one kiss, These are the things that I do miss. I close my eyes to see your face, The face that noone will ever replace. I lay in my bed and look at the pictures on the wall, What matters in the world are the things that are small. Never take for granted the people you love, You never know the day when it's there time to go above. Never let anyone take you for granted as well, When you start to feel it you will be able to tell. Always walk around with a smile on your face, Always give people time and there space. Never give up on who you love no matter what, Never turn to a knife and hide your tears with a cut. Keep your head high and fight to make it through, Do the things in life that you need to do. You are not alone and neither am I , It's ok to be hurt and it's ok to cry. So smile for me and I'll smile for you, A lie may hurt but the truth does to. By Tell me what you think? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
i_hate_the_world47 Posted August 9, 2004 Share Posted August 9, 2004 Amazing poem.You have a way with wprds. ~Meagan~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gauchori Posted August 9, 2004 Share Posted August 9, 2004 Good one. 8) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ComputerGuy Posted August 9, 2004 Share Posted August 9, 2004 Thats an awesome poem, It's really well done, keep up the brilliant work Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
under_the_pressure Posted August 9, 2004 Share Posted August 9, 2004 That poem was amazing. You have a real talent, I love your writing. My favorite line was Never give up on who you love no matter what, Never turn to a knife and hide your tears with a cut Very true, though I have did it. Good Job! hugs* under* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rbelle Posted August 9, 2004 Share Posted August 9, 2004 Amazing!!!! Wish i had the talent. So smile for me and I'll smile for you, A lie may hurt but the truth does to. This line is meant for me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bit3yerlip Posted August 9, 2004 Share Posted August 9, 2004 OMG I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! EXCELLENT POEM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shizzle Posted August 9, 2004 Share Posted August 9, 2004 wow, that was really touching!! lol i had guns & roses - dont cry on in the background lol i have so many poems, but i dunno why i dont post them on here Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ang3l2004 Posted August 9, 2004 Author Share Posted August 9, 2004 Aww thankyou all so much Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shizzle Posted August 9, 2004 Share Posted August 9, 2004 hey luv, i just re-read again, and again wow!!! lol got any tips on how to right a poem, i have got a new bunch of lines that descirbe how i feel, but there not the type of linnes that link togther like your ones! i just have to say the best part of that poem for me was this little bit Never take for granted the people you love, You never know the day when it's there time to go above. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stinkweed Posted August 9, 2004 Share Posted August 9, 2004 amazing poem. I really like your use of rhythm. It really was excellent. Great job =D>. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ang3l2004 Posted August 9, 2004 Author Share Posted August 9, 2004 Well if you want to write poems write from the heart express how you feel do whatever you feel is right and just reread it and think it over its not very hard but if its hard for you to write then just work on some starting with your feelings on certains things Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lunatic Posted August 9, 2004 Share Posted August 9, 2004 Wow What an awesome poem Ang3l I loved it. I really like the two lines that I quoted below. Your an amazing poet and you really should look into publishing your work somewhere. OMG I loved it! Love it love it love it.... You are not alone and neither am I , It's ok to be hurt and it's ok to cry. So smile for me and I'll smile for you, A lie may hurt but the truth does to. Hubman 8) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ang3l2004 Posted August 9, 2004 Author Share Posted August 9, 2004 Thankyou!!!!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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