SHaTTeReDSouL Posted August 5, 2004 Share Posted August 5, 2004 a world unknown to me i would like to meet the person that has no hate in their eyes, the one who only sees the good in people, not just the secret world of lies. i would like to visit the place, where this sacred person is, the man who is our father, can you lead me to this place of his? i would travel to another planet just to get a glimpse of him, to stand before him in a crowd, and sing with them his hymn. does this place even exist? if i found it would i be free? i guess i should just keep on dreaming, because his is a world unknown to me. comments are appreciated, thanks. - SHaTTeReDSouL Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForAnother Posted August 5, 2004 Share Posted August 5, 2004 Although I am not religious and I can't relate, I enjoyed your rhyme scheme. ForAnother Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
under_the_pressure Posted August 5, 2004 Share Posted August 5, 2004 Good poem! I like it, keep up the good work. under* oh and welcome to the site! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neva_black_n_white Posted August 5, 2004 Share Posted August 5, 2004 I agree im not too religious, but i guess theres different reasoning behind the meaning and purpose of the poem, i liked your structure and the versing of the actual poem, and found it intriguing to read..i must say there is certainly some talent about. i hope you find your answers though. kel Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
adrian777 Posted August 5, 2004 Share Posted August 5, 2004 I really liked your poem. I can relate...... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SHaTTeReDSouL Posted August 5, 2004 Author Share Posted August 5, 2004 thanks for all your comments, but i'm not religious nor is my poem meant to be. it's kind of hard to explain...but yea... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stinkweed Posted August 5, 2004 Share Posted August 5, 2004 That's a great poem. Good job =D>. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ang3l2004 Posted August 6, 2004 Share Posted August 6, 2004 nice poem Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
i_hate_the_world47 Posted August 7, 2004 Share Posted August 7, 2004 That was a wonderful poem.I can relate as well. ~Meagan~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EmptySoul Posted August 10, 2004 Share Posted August 10, 2004 I liked it. It flowed well, I thought. Empty Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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