dpressedone89 Posted July 31, 2004 Share Posted July 31, 2004 a child alone staring with two empty eyes nothing left inside her the truth behind when life dies she can barely think or breathe she cannot speak her own mind just the lies she's been fed by them secretly she longs to leave the past behind scared of those who try to help and running from her fears longing to evict this pain that has been building up for years she searches through the house praying to find a razor blade or knife finally sealed in her room alone this hollow girl takes her life but no funeral no one seems to care they could hear her screams but they pretended that she wasn't there now they have lost her and they still don't know what they had to the world she was unwanted but to me she was what i wanted so bad oppinions please? -sTiTcHeS fAr FrOm PeRfEcT Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stinkweed Posted August 1, 2004 Share Posted August 1, 2004 That's pretty sad. It's a very strong and tragic poem. It's very good. Good job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
i_hate_the_world47 Posted August 1, 2004 Share Posted August 1, 2004 That was a wonderful poem.It was sad and full of emotion. ~Meagan~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stephiepoo Posted August 1, 2004 Share Posted August 1, 2004 That is a really well written poem, very sad yet very deep. Very awesome job! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ang3l2004 Posted August 2, 2004 Share Posted August 2, 2004 good poem keep writing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EmptySoul Posted August 3, 2004 Share Posted August 3, 2004 i've read a lot of your poetry, but for some reason this is one of my favorite. maybe it's the subject, or it's just well written, or maybe both. EmptySoul Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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