nothingontheinside Posted July 22, 2004 Share Posted July 22, 2004 Yeah I wrote this within like 5-10 min so it prolly sucks. thought id post it anyways. The icy water hits our lungs You feel millions of needles piercing your insides The screams don't come out, no cry for help No one to save the suffering souls of our time All dying minds gather In the icy holes of hatred And in the deepest pits of hell We wait for only our deaths while watching others fall We rot away with every dead breath Taken by us, though we are already dead Our insides and souls died long ago Just like you Those who have suffered long enough And just want and need to leave Should be given the right to die The world is just too much Failure Rejoices It's your time to be happy Now that we're all dead Join me in this song we sing Only our own rotting minds are able to comprehend it "Help" we still scream silently Though there is no one to hear us No one tries; no one cares enough to save what is left Of our very own failed lives Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
i_hate_the_world47 Posted July 23, 2004 Share Posted July 23, 2004 wow that was good.really good.You have a way with words.That poem was packed with emotion. Meagan Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jaiva Posted July 26, 2004 Share Posted July 26, 2004 Your poem doesn't suck. It was intense. I liked it. Jaiva Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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