tiredofvampires Posted October 9, 2010 Share Posted October 9, 2010 Tonight I left my words To descend In the serene bowl of the bay, A tide on this south shore Sure to take them out Past the reef some time Before the sun is due. Without hurry, corner by corner, Folding in upon themselves, Pages separating Like white ballerinas, Drifting in and out of sand, They sung into the current About what we know Happened And all the dear things That shall one day be. They sang in a widening quartet, As they left the protection Of me, Sang into The tears of the planet Washing my shins In a waveless dusk. How gentle the night chosen. My words, Their ink did not Rinse away, but stark As the human mark Slowly being designificated By coral and brine, A relativity without human Language. We don’t need language Anymore. We need the undressed stars To do the spelling Of a hundred million Light years Of understanding. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
honesttoblog Posted November 28, 2010 Share Posted November 28, 2010 This is really really good- have you written anymore? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beoslasher Posted November 28, 2010 Share Posted November 28, 2010 TOV! Great work as always. Its great to read more of your stuff as it is always so good. Every line of this piece is beautiful by itself Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tiredofvampires Posted November 28, 2010 Author Share Posted November 28, 2010 Oh, thank you, both of you! I honestly have been unsure about this one...it felt mediocre to me. Me1993, yes, I've written more...but not as prolific as Beo! Beo, coming from you, that's an awesome compliment, I'm truly touched. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
honesttoblog Posted November 29, 2010 Share Posted November 29, 2010 That's okay- It's not mediocre at all Both of you are really good writers! Just read some of your others- Magic Mirror is definitely my favourite Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beoslasher Posted November 29, 2010 Share Posted November 29, 2010 Oh, thank you, both of you! I honestly have been unsure about this one...it felt mediocre to me. Me1993, yes, I've written more...but not as prolific as Beo! Beo, coming from you, that's an awesome compliment, I'm truly touched. It's no problem, I only speak the truth. I wish I was half the poet you are Keep writing! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mamajenkoz Posted December 3, 2010 Share Posted December 3, 2010 Wow...just wow.. Love it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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