i_hate_the_world47 Posted July 5, 2004 Share Posted July 5, 2004 I know that this is a sad poem but i hope some of your like it Cutting through the pain As she sat there on her bed Thinking about dying She huddled in a corner And began crying She walked over to her dresser Pulling out her escape She closed her bedroom door And pulled the drapes The blade was cold against her skin It made her shiver and shake And with this decision Her life was at stake She felt a warm sensation Dripping from her open vein It was all over There would be no more pain She began to fell weak Everything was blurry Death was coming for her And it was coming in a hurry She fell to the floor Lifeless and done And after many years of fighting Death had finally won Comments/questions are greatly appreciated Meagan Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roasted Carrots Posted July 5, 2004 Share Posted July 5, 2004 I really like your poem, especially the ending....It definitely left an impression. I also congratualte you on controlling your anger through poetry and not self-harm. You can PM me if you want to talk. *Sidenote* Oxygen, your comments are really hurtful. People can have serious problems at anytime in their life. I can see you have problems because you're makeing hurtful comments to hide your own insecurity. The post was asking for constructive critiscm, not shallow comments by boneheads. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
i_hate_the_world47 Posted July 5, 2004 Author Share Posted July 5, 2004 Thanx Roasted Carrots.And no i wasnt raped or ne thing like that.I have just had some very rough times.Sometimes i take it out in poetry but i do cut sometimes.Though i wish i could quit it is hard. Meagan Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
i_hate_the_world47 Posted July 5, 2004 Author Share Posted July 5, 2004 When i cut myself it doesnt hurt.It hurts later.And its not as easy to stop as you think.Cutting is like an addiction.The only way you would know what its like is if you have ever cut. Meagan Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CarterJonas Posted July 5, 2004 Share Posted July 5, 2004 hi, I agree with roasted carrotts and also like your poem. It would take me ages to write a poem, I'm afraid to say not one of my specialities! As you say this is a good way for you to realease your anger through poetry and not to self harm. regards Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ShroudedSorrow24 Posted July 5, 2004 Share Posted July 5, 2004 yeah, I liked your poem. I cannot relate to it b/c I have never cut, but when I was reading it I felt the emotion you had while you wrote it. And Oxygen... dont kill ur self it's stupid.. unless ur homeless and no one can help u... that when u can kill urself thats just mean Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
June4life Posted July 5, 2004 Share Posted July 5, 2004 Can't we all just get along? I thought your peom was very good. It was full of imagery, and I felt the emotion through it. At times when life is hard, you have to work through it. I can see in your poetry that this is your escape. Writing and cutting. Just please, get help. Only if you want it though. Live is worth living and some day you will realize. You're going to meet one special person who makes life worth living. Trust me. I've been there. If you need to talk please PM me! PS- Do you want help to stop cutting? Maybe resort to your parents? I dont know ur situation, but leave more info and we will all see what we can do to help you! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
justdifferent Posted July 14, 2004 Share Posted July 14, 2004 your poem felt so real to me i am a cutter and everything that you said i felt as if i had done it before you've got a gift don't waste it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hawaiian chicka Posted July 17, 2004 Share Posted July 17, 2004 I love your poem. I can totally relate cause I cut. I am asamed to say I cut but anyway. I think its great. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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