dpressedone89 Posted June 10, 2004 Share Posted June 10, 2004 The suicide of Jesus Christ the life is lost the world has suffered great loss ever since the fateful day we took your life upon the cross you came willingly into our world knowing you were going to die you had a chance to save yourself you broke your rules that we live by delivering yourself to death you never tried to hide the grave is written my name is jesus christ and this is my suicide you died for the wicked to be forgiven they never thanked you at all they sell the cross that killed you and idolize your fall worship thy teachings and not thy self brought death if only we knew your final thought or watched your last breath oppinions please -stitches Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tainted_soul Posted June 10, 2004 Share Posted June 10, 2004 i thought it was good. it was very deep. i thought it was going to be heretical or screligious, but it's not at all, it actually has way more meaning than any run of the mill "praise god" church hymn, and it's something to think about as well. i think that it's a great poem to share with people, the kind i wish i saw more often. seriously, it's good, keep at it man. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sisterlynch Posted June 10, 2004 Share Posted June 10, 2004 I thought it was pretty good, not overdone. Excellent. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frodo Baggins Posted June 11, 2004 Share Posted June 11, 2004 VERY interesting premise. It's a song of praise on Christ, not what's been built around him. Personally, I'm an atheist, but I still find the value in Christ, and this is a poem that shows appreciation for who he was and what he stood for. It's very well written, and the title catches your eye immediately. THAT is very important. You have a strong title that leads into a well thoughtout poem. It warrants repeated readings. Regardless of faith, it's a poem that can be appreciated for not only the ideals of the author, but also what it stands for. I'm impressed. Keep up the good work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
under_the_pressure Posted June 11, 2004 Share Posted June 11, 2004 I think that poem was great. I really enjoyed it! ~Under~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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