sg36 Posted May 2, 2004 Share Posted May 2, 2004 This was the first real poem i ever wrote in my life please give me feedback on what you think. If only i had the courage to say hi If only i wasn't so shy Would i tell you how your smile lights up even my hardest days Or how you have the most beautiful blue eyes i have ever seen If only i would have smiled as i passed you in the hall if only i would have had the courage to say anything at all Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EmptySoul Posted May 2, 2004 Share Posted May 2, 2004 I like it. EmptySoul Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Caldus Posted May 3, 2004 Share Posted May 3, 2004 sg36, poems are extremely subjective material. There is no way to appropriately measure how good a poem is. In reality, each poem has its own internal meaning that may be implicit or explicit. I see your poem as a preview of what you may be going through (or not, I do not know) in your life. So when you say that it is your first poem, do not let that make you think that it will not be any good! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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