Persona poem

[redrose85]

I somehow found myself in a poetry class this semester. Could be that it's required for creative writing I'm supposed to do a persona style poem- a poem written from the viewpoint of someone or something else. I sat down and wrote this, no revisions, and thought I'd see if it needs something else.

 

Slow burn

 

Red, raw, aching

 

I'm screaming, and I KNOW you hear me

 

Tepid liquids rush by

 

Vain attempts to placate, to stifle the fire

 

My anger rages on. I KNOW you hear me

 

I know that you feel me.

 

Don't ignore me, you CAN'T ignore me, the source of your discomfort

 

Slow burn,

 

Scarlet, boiling, seething

 

Crying out for attention

 

Only time will relieve you

 

Of my tantrum

 

Of my infection

[Beoslasher]

Wow, amazing poem

Your word choice is really great, such strong words (raw, screaming, seething)

and the way that it has such a strong and forceful delivery, makes it a much more powerful poem.

You def got some writing potential =)

I believe its from the view of fire, but i could be way off lol

[redrose85]

Nope, it's not a fire in a literal sense

[Beoslasher]

Nope, it's not a fire in a literal sense

 

Sunburn=P, hmm maybe the passion of anger?