(Su/Si) Terror grips my racing heart....For lack of a better name.

[Jacanorie]

The timing's a little off in places...

 

Terror grips my racing heart,

My cheeks burn bright and hot,

I clench my hands into tight fists,

And try to walk on fearlessly.

 

I don’t know why I’m so afraid,

Why life makes me so scared.

All I know is I’m petrified,

And you are never there.

 

I tell you all my secret fears,

But all you ever do is laugh.

You just don’t understand me,

Now you won’t have the chance.

 

The fake old smile is fading,

My soul is growing faint,

I just can’t do this anymore,

I’m too tired, too weak.

 

I can’t pretend I’m happy,

That I don’t hate myself.

I won’t pretend I want to live,

It’s too far from the truth.

 

I’m leaving it all behind me,

No more fears or worries.

In a minute I’ll be free,

Away from all this hell.

 

I shiver as it touches my skin,

The metal’s cold and exciting.

I draw it slowly accross my wrists.

The end is drawing closer.

Blood runs down my arm,

Red rivers being formed.

The pain is overwhelming,

And now I feel so calm.

 

I collapse on to the floor,

My heart is almost stopping,

The world fades slowly away,

And now I am no more.

[AnotherBrokenDoll]

Gee Jacanorie that was really powerful. I feel your pain, i really do.

 

I think the timing was fine, to me nothing is more powerful then true emotion, if you write how you feel its a great piece

[Jacanorie]

Thank you. =)

 

I have trouble with timing because when I say it I know what's coming so I can make it flow really well. When my friend read it he didn't. So, yeah it left me puzzled. But I'm glad to hear it's okay. =)))

[Jacanorie]

Wish I'd got to see your post "Daddy Bear". Oh well lol. =)

 

It's just nice to have my poetry read.