EmptySoul Posted November 17, 2003 Share Posted November 17, 2003 i stare into the depths of the night sky it's like a reflection of my soul the falling raindrops are the tears i cry and the blackness is the pain i've come to know the stars you can see on a cloudless night are those who make me shine when clouds come and they disappear it's when i'm forsaken and left behind please tell me what you think of this poem everyone, good or bad. EmptySoul Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
enadevoli Posted November 17, 2003 Share Posted November 17, 2003 i honestly think thats a very good poem! have you written many poems? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EmptySoul Posted November 17, 2003 Author Share Posted November 17, 2003 ive written for a long time but this is the first thing ive written recently. EmptySoul Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
wisdomgained Posted November 17, 2003 Share Posted November 17, 2003 that's really good... but I do not like its undertones of pain and lonliness--you ok? send a pm if you'd like. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
klw777 Posted November 17, 2003 Share Posted November 17, 2003 I write poetry at times too but i have to be in thwe right mood so i might not write for ages. Thats a great poem, really great. Its a good way to express emotions. I would put it in a competition if you feel able? get proffessional feedback? x Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lunatic Posted November 17, 2003 Share Posted November 17, 2003 I liked it alot. Hubman Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EmptySoul Posted November 17, 2003 Author Share Posted November 17, 2003 thanks everyone. im a generally happy person. but i have my moments. i write more when im down then anything, so most people who read my writing are just getting the more depressed side of me, so dont worry lol. any more comments happily accepted. EmptySoul Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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