sarey Posted January 15, 2008 Share Posted January 15, 2008 Alone under this abandoned, old tree, the leaves dropping one by one, as my tears do when I'm left alone, when someone close to me leaves, I wonder if this tree cries just like me. Laying in the grass now, I see a butterfly, it flutters around me, I imagine my Nan, she loved them dearly, I wonder if she can see me, I wonder what she'd be thinking, whether she would be proud, or whether she would be mad. Walking down a street, with others around, joyful and happy, I'm the odd one out, with a frown instead of a smile, alone is what I'm destined to be, or so it seems. I arrive home, walking up these stairs, and into my room, I lay on my bed, thinking, I wonder if this is how my life was planned, alone, abandoned, I scream so loud, but it falls amoung deafened ears, I cry so much, but they don't see the tears. I want someone to take my hand, to never let go, I want someone to love and care, and never stop, I want someone to hold me, to never leave, I want someone to stay, and never leave me astray. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stu147 Posted January 15, 2008 Share Posted January 15, 2008 Wow! Did you write this Sarey? I think it's beautiful. I really REALLY like this. For me one of the best poems I have read here. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sarey Posted January 15, 2008 Author Share Posted January 15, 2008 I did. Wrote it just now. Feeling bit crappy so decided to write some poetry. Thankyou Stu. I appreciate your comments. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
girl friend Posted January 15, 2008 Share Posted January 15, 2008 Incredible hun, I'm sorry u feel so alone. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sarey Posted January 19, 2008 Author Share Posted January 19, 2008 thanks girl friend. x Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JadedStar Posted January 19, 2008 Share Posted January 19, 2008 Very nice writing Sarey. Hopefully the sadness will lift tho honey. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hosswhispra Posted January 27, 2008 Share Posted January 27, 2008 Both very expressive and deep, Sarey. I like the personification of the trees loosing their leaves-as our eyes "lose" tears. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sarey Posted January 27, 2008 Author Share Posted January 27, 2008 thankyou hosswhispra, and Jaded Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tiredofvampires Posted January 28, 2008 Share Posted January 28, 2008 Very touching and deeply felt -- I could feel all of what you are saying. I, too, love the part about the trees and tears, and the transition to the butterfly and your Nan. I would love to see more of these. Keep writing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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