lonedrifter18 Posted October 15, 2003 Share Posted October 15, 2003 I feel like no one/Has demonstrated or expressed my struggles/So it's my job to talk about/The petty and important things that make me scuffle/The things that make me scuffle/Tussle with life/So let's talk about the 14 year-old inside/Who became attached to the knife/How I tried to talk to girls/And yield to the fall/Withstanding another night/Of the dreaded blue balls/Not around gunshots or grindin'/Just a brilliant boy with dreams who was poor/Baring the pain of my parents' divorce/Which made my insides sore Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
just_smile Posted October 15, 2003 Share Posted October 15, 2003 hey lonedrifter18, wow i thought that it was great, was unfinished poem the name or was it really unfinshed and needs more adding to it? because i think that it is fine how it is, i thought that it was deep, heartfelt and powerful. anyways if you need help with it i somethimes write so i might be able to. hope this helps ~LJ =; Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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