Prince Posted October 6, 2003 Share Posted October 6, 2003 Hey, I wrote this for that wonderful female of mine. It concerns the language of the body as opposed to words. Enjoy. Comments welcome When yes means no, and no means yes is right the same as wrong? would it even matter if, all happiness was gone. I draw the sword of evils ice and swing at unseem faces, is the mist- lifeless rain hiding destined places. The cosmic railroads overhead, dance aboput the sky, why am I content to stay, where surely I will die. When words have lost all meaning, and the final angel speaks- nothing but a whisper... of distant mountain peaks. Jump the chasm- minds frontier, and lanf amoungst the fray, Or is there another route, from which I've turned away. As words of hate and love combine, to form something so vile, a simple truth echos my mind, stimulated by a smile. For an instant- eternities star, words and sound mean naught, in dying we restore our life, in living we are taught. I know that eyes are said to be the windows to our soul, why then are our pupils, black as blackened coal? The answer must not be in words- the spirit interrupted. But sight of mind, touach of heart- the language uncorrupted. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
materia_goddess Posted October 6, 2003 Share Posted October 6, 2003 wow, very insightful. id comment, but im still trying to wrap my mind around it. did you think of it all by yourself? i think its terrific and excellent use of language. unique style and choice of topic. if she has any sense she'll appreciate every individual line with careful consideration. hehe keep us up to date with what happens with this girl ok! ~best of luck to you~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Happy_Go_Lucky_Heb Posted October 6, 2003 Share Posted October 6, 2003 Hey Prince I like the poem its very deep. I can't really grasp the language of the body part in relation to the poem exactly though until the last sentences. Is it that you've purposely taking a "scenic-route" to that point or is there a hidden meaning that I can't see? Happy Heb Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neva_black_n_white Posted October 6, 2003 Share Posted October 6, 2003 hey there, i loved the poem and so should the girl providing that your going to show her....are you? i thought it was amazing anayway lol great use of words and very nice comparisons. im impressed lol. kel Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
taken Posted October 11, 2003 Share Posted October 11, 2003 very impressive. i have never seen or heard a poem that got me speechless. its very deep. i loved it. you've got talent. keep it up. i also think you should show the girl. bravo. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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